Cindy’s voice pulled him back from the edge of his spiraling thoughts. “We’ll find a way through this,” she said softly, her gaze steady and reassuring.
He looked into her eyes, drawing strength from her unwavering resolve. The warmth of her hand in his was a small comfort in an increasingly unfamiliar world. “You’re right,” he agreed, his voice firming with newfound determination. “We can’t lose hope.”
Madison, Krysi, and Ava lounged on the living room couch, a quiet late-afternoon light streaming through the blinds and casting soft lines across the floor. Madison flipped through the television channels, the sound of rapid-fire clicks interspersed with the girls’ idle chatter about school, boys, and trivial gossip. Ava stretched her legs out, toes wiggling playfully, while Krysi leaned in to share a secret, voice lowered to a conspiratorial whisper. Madison offered half-smiles, her attention divided between the remote in her hand and the messages popping up on her phone.
The cozy hum of the room was shattered by the abrupt sound of the front door opening and closing with a decisive thud. All three girls sat up, startled, their conversation cutting off mid-sentence. Madison’s hand froze on the remote. They turned as one to see McKenzie stepping into the house, her posture tight with purpose. A faint tension pressed into the air, like the momentary hush before a storm breaks.
“Hey, Kenz,” Madison greeted, confusion creasing her brow. She tilted her head and tried to sound casual. “What’s going on? I thought you were out for the night?” Her tone was puzzled, a note of curiosity blending with surprise.
McKenzie kicked off her shoes with a controlled calm, placing them neatly by the door. “That was the plan,” she replied, her voice steady but carrying a hint of annoyance. “Until I got your message. What’s going on?” She crossed her arms, shoulders drawn back, surveying the scene with cool, assessing eyes.
Madison’s heart gave a small, guilty flutter. She glanced at Krysi and Ava, who both watched silently, sensing a shift in the room’s balance. Madison tried for nonchalance, lifting her chin. “You didn’t need to come home just for that. It’s not a huge deal. Dad was… speaking out of turn, not remembering that I’m his primary guardian. He needs a little reminder about how things are run.” She shrugged, as if dismissing the matter.
McKenzie’s lips pressed together, and her gaze sharpened. Her voice, when it came, carried authority Madison had never quite grown used to. “First off, they are still our parents, Madison,” she said, each word measured. “I’ve let certain things slide, your attitude, how you address them. That ends now.” McKenzie stepped closer, her presence radiating a quiet force. “You need to show them the slightest bit of respect at the very least. I understand they’re Littles, but they are still Mom and Dad. For everything they’ve done for us, you owe them at least basic courtesy. Even if it’s just thanking them when they do something for you.”
A flush of defiance flickered across Madison’s face, but the look McKenzie gave her left no room for argument. “Fine, whatever. Sure,” Madison muttered, her voice laced with a reluctant edge.
McKenzie’s eyes narrowed, catching the hint of attitude. “No, not ‘fine whatever.’ I mean it, Mads. Save that tone for Mom if you must, but I won’t tolerate it.” Without warning, McKenzie closed the distance and hooked an arm around Madison’s neck in a gentle but firm headlock. Ava stifled a giggle, and Krysi’s eyes widened slightly, both girls sensing the shift in power.
“Okay, okay, I’m sorry!” Madison gasped, tapping at McKenzie’s arm in surrender. The unspoken hierarchy was unmistakable, McKenzie’s dominance not just a legal arrangement, but something physical, immediate.
Releasing her sister, McKenzie relaxed her stance and smoothed out her shirt. “You’ll always be my little sister, don’t forget that,” she said, her voice softening. There was an undercurrent of care beneath her firm words. “I know this is hard on you too. But one more thing: don’t ever punish Dad like that again. I will see him whenever I want, no permission needed. Out of respect for you, I’ll honor the punishment you’ve already dealt this time, he can stay in your room for the next month, but keep me out of your punishments. Clear?”
Madison’s pride flared briefly, but facing McKenzie’s calm determination, she yielded. “Yeah, Kenz,” she said quietly, sincerity edging into her voice. “I’m sorry.”
The tension in the room receded slightly, like a held breath finally released. McKenzie nodded, shooting a quick glance at Ava and Krysi, who offered understanding looks. The younger girls seemed relieved that the confrontation had ended without further escalation.
“I’m going to talk to Mom and Dad,” McKenzie announced, stepping toward the hallway. Her tone was polite but firm, a gentle dismissal that the other two girls accepted with quiet goodbyes to McKenzie.
McKenzie paused at the threshold, turning back to face Madison one last time. “Oh, and this name thing is ridiculous,” she added, her voice carrying a final note of authority. “Dad will not be participating in that. You can do what you want with Mom, but that’s final.”
Madison nodded, subdued. “Understood,” she managed, avoiding McKenzie’s gaze as she lifted her phone again, scrolling absently. The tension lingered in her posture, her shoulders slightly hunched, as if absorbing the weight of McKenzie’s directives.
With that, McKenzie disappeared down the hallway, leaving Madison, Ava, and Krysi in the living room. The silence that followed felt charged, the air humming with unspoken thoughts. The television still flickered with muted images, and the scent of fabric softener hung faintly in the space, a domestic comfort belying the complex dynamics that had just played out.
Ava cleared her throat, searching Madison’s face for a cue, while Krysi fiddled with a loose thread on a pillow. They said nothing, recognizing that Madison needed a moment to compose herself.
Madison took a slow breath, her fingers still on her phone’s screen, but her attention elsewhere. She looked toward the habitat in the corner of her mind, knowing Greg and Cindy were upstairs, waiting. The world felt slightly shifted off its axis, but life would continue. She’d comply with McKenzie’s terms because she had no choice, and because, deep down, she knew better than to push her sister too far.
Madison forced a small, tight smile, breaking the silence. “So,” she said, her voice quiet but steadier now, “where were we, girls?” The question hung in the air, an attempt to reclaim the casual atmosphere of before.
Ava and Krysi responded in kind, voices subdued but game, and the moment passed into memory, another instance of the new order asserting itself in their family life.
The quiet in Madison’s room was broken only by the soft hum of distant voices and the gentle whir of the habitat’s ventilation system. Inside the enclosure, Greg and Cindy sat close together, absorbing the aftermath of the recent confrontation. The glow of the bedside lamp cast elongated shadows on the walls, and the faint scent of laundry detergent lingered in the air, a subtle reminder of ordinary household routines turned strange in their altered world.
Then, the bedroom door opened, the soft creak of hinges heralding a presence who moved with calm purpose. Both Greg and Cindy looked up as McKenzie entered, her expression a blend of concern and composed resolve. She didn’t rush; instead, she let the door close behind her with a measured quiet that spoke volumes.
Madison was absent, left downstairs entertaining her friends, so McKenzie approached the habitat without distraction. Her gaze swept the room, pausing on the rumpled blankets of Madison’s bed, the scattering of personal effects on the dresser, and finally settling on the habitat. Each step she took was deliberate, her posture radiating an authority tempered by empathy.
Leaning down, McKenzie examined the habitat’s control panel. She tapped the button for the two-way communicator, a soft beep confirming the connection. The subtle glow of the panel’s display reflected in her eyes.
“Hi, guys,” she greeted, her voice warm but carrying a note of weariness, as if she were juggling too many responsibilities at once. Bending further, McKenzie lowered herself to their level. The overhead light in the bedroom formed a gentle halo around her head, highlighting the subtle tension etched across her features, ines of worry that hadn’t been there before all this began.
Greg felt a surge of relief at the sight of his eldest daughter. Her presence was reassuring, a bridge to the life they once knew. “McKenzie,” he began, his tone a mix of urgency and frustration. He noticed again that his collar didn’t constrict when he spoke her name, a subtle sign of McKenzie’s more lenient approach. Cindy, beside him, glanced sharply at his collar, confirming that McKenzie had allowed him this small mercy. A welcome change she thought.
“Ms. Wessen has been having us do her homework,” Greg explained, voice tight, “and we’re eating out of a dispenser over here like… like animals. I didn’t mean to upset her. I just mentioned that you were my guardian when she spoke as if I belonged solely to her.”
McKenzie sighed quietly, a sound that conveyed both understanding and gentle exasperation. She settled onto her knees, bringing herself fully into their line of sight. “Dad,” she said softly, her tone threading patience through the syllables. Greg recognized the voice she used to mediate disputes in their old life, when Madison complained about chores or curfews. “You can’t do that. Madison’s always been touchy about our relationship. She doesn’t like feeling second place. I know she’s not actually second place with you, but sometimes she worries she is.”
She paused, considering her next words carefully. “Legally speaking, if Madison and I separated, you would come with me, and Mom would stay with Madison. But no one wants that. We’re all trying to avoid splitting you two up. Madison and I are sharing you both, and she’s the primary guardian because she found you first and she insisted on it since she found you and was doing the initial work.. You know how she gets, and Littles have always been important to her. She wanted Littles since the beginning.”
“Pumpkin,” Greg said gently, a note of pleading in his voice. The old nickname tasted bittersweet on his tongue. Cindy watched him, feeling the weight of each word, the careful dance they all performed now.
McKenzie held up her hand, silencing him kindly. “Things are mostly smoothed over, but you’ll have to apologize to her,” she explained, her tone steady, like a teacher outlining a lesson. “I know you don’t want to, and for the next two or three weeks, I’ll still see you, but just for a bit in the evenings, no overnights. I could overrule her, but I won’t. I want this to work, and if I come in guns blazing, it won’t help. We’re adjusting to a new dynamic: we’re still sisters, but I’m also her parent. Balance is delicate here.”
“McKenzie,” Cindy interjected, the single word loaded with emotion. At once, Cindy felt her collar tighten, a constriction that served as a relentless reminder of her diminished status. Greg quickly reached out, placing a cautionary hand on Cindy’s arm, and McKenzie observed them both, her eyes reflecting sympathy and hesitance.
“Mom,” McKenzie said softly, her voice laced with unspoken emotion. She hesitated, searching for the right words as she looked into Cindy’s eyes. “I’m sorry. We’re not quite there yet. I love you, I do. It’s just…” Her voice tapered off, uncertainty and pain flickering across her face.
Cindy managed a faint, understanding smile. “I get it,” she replied quietly. “I have to prove myself. I’m sorry for not giving your ideas and opinions the consideration they deserved when it mattered. I know saying it now doesn’t erase the past, but I am sorry, and I do love you. I’m so proud of who you’ve become.”
A flicker of relief and lingering hurt crossed McKenzie’s face. “Thanks, Mom,” she whispered, her shoulders relaxing slightly. “I want to believe you. I just need to see it in your actions. I need to know you genuinely believe what you’re saying, that you trust my way could be right, and you’re willing to put in the work. If you can do that, I don’t know what the future holds, but I’ll be open to trying.”
She took a breath, her eyes glistening slightly with unshed tears. “But you have to understand, both of you,” she said, voice gently insistent, “you are Littles now. Things will be different because of that.”
Greg, wanting to ease the tension, interjected gently. “Of course,” he said, though the words felt strange. “But you can’t expect us to do Ms. Wessen’s homework.” He addressed Madison by her title, recalling McKenzie’s earlier admonition about respecting Madison’s role, and noted with a flicker of wry amusement how McKenzie’s lips twitched in a subtle smile at the gesture.
“It’s within her rights, and it’s not abnormal,” McKenzie replied, a calm acceptance in her tone. “Even if I’ve never been a fan. If her tests scores stay the same and she knows the material. My hands will be tied.”
A sudden tension cut through the air as Madison’s voice rang out from the doorway, sharper now. “See! That means you do it, and you shouldn’t have to hear it from McKenzie first.” She stepped into the room, arms crossed, eyes flashing with irritation. Her earlier warmth gone, replaced by the firmness of someone asserting her territory.
“Mads, you promised,” McKenzie reminded her, gentle reproach woven into her words. Greg and Cindy watched the sisters, feeling the subtle shifts in authority passing between them like currents beneath a still surface.
“I’m keeping my promise,” Madison insisted, taking another step forward. “I’m allowing them to make it up to me. But I haven’t heard any apologies, and I don’t appreciate my Littles running to you every time something doesn’t go their way.”
“Guys,” McKenzie said, turning her attention to her parents. “Madison is right. You never let us pit you against each other growing up. You can’t guardian-shop now. If Madison says no, you have to accept that.” She looked back at her sister. “Mads, you could be a bit more reasonable. I know you and Mom don’t think like I do, but they deserve some special consideration.”
Madison’s posture relaxed a fraction. “I was being nice, McKenzie,” she said, voice defensive but softening. “I let them manage their own time. I could’ve scheduled everything like Mom used to with Littles. I gave them autonomy, even got them Little tablets. You said as long as my grades don’t slip, it’s fine.”
“And I told them the same thing,” McKenzie acknowledged. “Doing your homework isn’t out of line. Not if it helps you learn the material and pass the tests.”
Greg took a breath, choosing his words carefully. “Ms. Wessen,” he began, inclining his head slightly, “I’m sorry. I understand you’re my guardian and deserve respect.”
Cindy, standing beside him, squeezed his hand and added softly, “I apologize as well. We will do better, Ms. Wessen, to meet your standards.”
Madison’s shoulders eased, satisfaction flickering in her gaze. McKenzie gave Madison a gentle nudge. “You could stand to watch that temper,” she teased, reaching out and flicking Madison’s forehead lightly.
“Hey!” Madison exclaimed, the tension dissolving as she attempted—unsuccessfully—to flick McKenzie back. Both sisters broke into a reluctant smile, the atmosphere brightening.
McKenzie sighed, hunger lacing her tone. “I left before dinner, so I’m starving. I’m going to find something to eat.”
“Sorry, Mistress Wessen,” Greg said quietly, bowing his head. Cindy followed suit. They remembered the rules, how McKenzie had negotiated a small mercy for Greg but not for Cindy.
McKenzie glanced at her parents, her expression reflecting a momentary sadness. “You can use my name, Dad. Mom, you’ll have to respect Madison’s decisions.”
Madison nodded firmly. “Mom said a Little shouldn’t use first names—they aren’t equals. I’ll excuse Dad, but Mom must adhere to the rules she set. No exceptions.”
McKenzie’s lips pressed together, conceding the point. “You’re right, Mads. Thanks for the leniency with Dad.” She reached out, pulling Madison into a warm hug, as if cementing a fragile peace.
“Anytime,” Madison replied softly, her gaze drifting to Cindy’s tiny form. The look Madison gave her mother was a jumble of emotions, affection, regret, determination—before she pulled away and turned toward the door.
“I’m going to scrounge something to eat,” McKenzie said gently. “They can’t join us for dinner, Mads?” she asked quietly, more to confirm than to argue.
Madison’s jaw tightened. “They can eat here. That was part of the punishment. You promised you wouldn’t undermine me if I was reasonable.”
McKenzie nodded, accepting the terms. “They’ll eat here, then,” she said softly. “Mom, Dad, it’s important you listen to Madison.”
With that, McKenzie slipped from the room, leaving Madison, Greg, and Cindy briefly alone. Madison looked down at her parents, her face carefully composed. “I hope you’re happy. McKenzie was out with friends, but she rushed home because our Littles couldn’t behave.”
Her voice carried a note of reproach, but also something akin to disappointment. “It should be clear now that I’m in charge of you, and I have McKenzie’s support. My word is law.” She paused, letting the words sink in. “I have friends over. I’m going to join them. My Littles stay here—you haven’t earned the privilege of leaving the habitat today. Tomorrow’s another day, and I’m willing to give you a fresh start. Don’t make me regret it.”
As Madison stepped toward the door, she hesitated once more, her gaze softening, a glimpse of the old Madison flickering through. “I do love you guys,” she said quietly. “And I’m sorry you’re Littles. I know it’s hard. But, as Mom always said, no exceptions.”
The room fell silent as she departed, the gentle click of the door echoing in her wake. Greg and Cindy exchanged a weary glance, the weight of the conversation pressing down on them like heavy, humid air.
“Well,” Greg said softly, voice hushed in the quiet room, “that could have gone worse.”
Cindy nodded, her expression distant, thoughtful. “At least we have a chance to make things right,” she murmured, a tentative spark of hope flickering in her eyes. “Maybe, over time, we can find a new balance.”
“Maybe,” Greg agreed, uncertainty still shadowing his gaze. “But it won’t be easy.”
Reaching out, Cindy took his hand, holding it tightly. “We’ll face it together,” she said softly, the simple words carrying a promise of solidarity.
He managed a faint smile. “Yes,” he replied. “Together.”
As they settled back into the habitat’s confined warmth, the muted sounds of the household drifted from behind the closed door. Despite the challenges and the uncertainty, the faint glimmer of understanding between them and their daughters offered a small ember of hope. And in that quiet moment, they held onto it, determined not to let it slip away.
Kenzie was super balanced in this. I love that she tossed her plans aside just from Madison’s text and wasn’t afraid to show who’s on top infront of her friends. Probably a good thing too, as her friends need to know that as well. probably even more so than Madison
Kenzie is trying hard to do things right and to the best of her ability especially as she is still young herself. But she wants it to work. So while she recognizes that the solutions aren’t perfect she si trying to be fair to everyone while still being in charge.
she’s doing a good job. I was worried of Madison taking advantage of their sister bond and pulling things over on her. Like rather than pointing out they’re doing her homework, they should have pointed out they do everyones homework, just to see if Kenzie knows that.
either way though, doing this all in front of her friends was more important to me. her friends need to understand it’s not Madison on her own and that Kenzie is actually taking that parental role, including punishments and things like that. helps set real expectations.
I agree her friends seeing McKenzie in the leadership role and taking responsibility and action for things is key. As then they know Madison can’t just run wild.
The homework is complicated as its not uncommon and more McKenzie just doesn’t like it. But that doesn’t make it wrong.
As I can not like Pepsi but it doesn’t make it wrong to like it.
So its more McKenzie seeing how it effects madison’s grades.
like a real parent and now head of the family, she is realizing that her personal stuff come second to family business. That is how it is with all good parents. I know my old party buds stopped seeing me. I think you writing in Kenz having to miss a personal activity to do a head to the family business was very insightful and good writing.
Kenz really saved the day. She was the real head of the family even before they got the virus. Now she is just taking her real spot. I think Kenz giving her parents regular hugs like a good parent would really make it clear she is a loving head of the family like she hugged Madison even though she is being a bully.
GOOOOOOO ONNNNNN MCKENZIE!!!
1. I love McKenzie
2. I still love how layered and conflicted Madison is, the little apology at the end…. Light at the end of the tunnel
3. I understand why McKenzie has to be balanced! A leader can’t pick sides
4. Flicker of hope from McKenzie and Cindy
5. Ok name change 1 little down 1 to go
6 “keep me out of your punishments” I can imagine the anxiety she felt when she saw that text and how hurt she thought Greg must have been and to rush straight home! I love that
Don’t want this to end
You still have a few episodes to go and even when it ends it snot like its gone forever. Just a few months.
Madison is getting built of bad Carma, even though they say she is ok others got it when they were told they were immune. I’m thinking a little Madison is just Carma lol
Absolutely loved this !!!
Glad to hear it. I know you’ve been concerned about redemption.
I’m glad kenz stepped in but when at the end Madison said she loved her parents, she doesn’t treat them that way. You don’t treat someone you love and that sacrificed to give you a good life less then when they have a physical disability happen to them because that’s basically what happen because they only got smaller, their mind is the same. It reminds me of family members treating someone like they are a animal if they are dating another race or a different religion. Being a teen doesn’t give a excuse for treating a family member like her dad the way she does. Her mom is the only one that there is any lea way on and even that she is now in the power position and can say her teaches were wrong. As always a good writing even though of course I’m looking foreword to a more heartwarming direction because there is already to much bad stuff going on lol. Again I’m a sap lol.
overall I agree with you. i do think one think one difference is the part about the disability as culturally they view the infected as end of life once the smallara virus becomes active as the matter, molecules, the cells which make up the person after 24 hours are lost and the body of the little is remade with a copy of the original memories.
so there is a cultural divide as to if the little is a new person with old memories or if they are same person in a remade smaller body.
It kind of comes down to human soul/memories, etc and how view that. It is canonically a personal belief.
So it is in universe a bit more complicated which is also tied into religion.
thanks for the info, it makes my crazy tech/monster fanfic more possible. I was slowing down because I thought I was to far off. Thanks for being so creative to inspire this old aerospace geek to write. Its so new for me and I’m not good but its fun=)
Thanks, I try to be creative when doing this to make it fun and also flesh out the world so its not just the typical person shrinks story.
I’ve been fascinated buy size vs intelligence since I watched cartoons and read comics as a kid.
I was wondering, by Madison following Cindy’s twisted teachings. Doesn’t that mean that Madison is a Big Parva because DNA wise she came from two parvas?. It would be like two bulldogs having puppies, they’re all bulldogs. Same with the Wessen family. It’s simple Biology that many cults don’t like.
0) some of these don;t age well as I kept reading, but I left them in any way because I like how I react to information as it’s shown.
1.1) “All three girls sat up, startled, their conversation cutting off mid-sentence. Madison’s hand froze on the remote.” McKenzie’s being treated like a parent after all.
1.2) “They turned as one to see McKenzie stepping into the house, her posture tight with purpose. A faint tension pressed into the air, like the momentary hush before a storm breaks.” Fuck ‘em up, McKenzie.
2) “Until I got your message. What’s going on?” she knew she was needed.
3.1) “Madison’s heart gave a small, guilty flutter” Yeah baby, she knows she fucked up.
3.2) “You didn’t need to come home just for that. It’s not a huge deal. Dad was… speaking out of turn, not remembering that I’m his primary guardian. He needs a little reminder about how things are run.” I don’t think he’s getting reminded.
4) “I’ve let certain things slide, your attitude, how you address them. That ends now.” probably shouldn’t have let it start.
5) “For everything they’ve done for us, you owe them at least basic courtesy. Even if it’s just thanking them when they do something for you.” Finally, but that would also include McKenzie to Cindy
6.1) “No, not ‘fine whatever.’ I mean it, Mads” yeah, don’t take that shit from her.
6.2) “Save that tone for Mom if you must, but I won’t tolerate it.” I get where she’s coming from but it also goes against her previous point.
7) “Without warning, McKenzie closed the distance and hooked an arm around Madison’s neck in a gentle but firm headlock.” Just as the prophet foretold (Madison mentioning it in MW S1 E28)
8) “The unspoken hierarchy was unmistakable, McKenzie’s dominance not just a legal arrangement, but something physical, immediate.” siblings do be like that.
9) “You’ll always be my little sister, don’t forget that,” also mentioned in MW S1 E28.
101) “don’t ever punish Dad like that again. I will see him whenever I want, no permission needed” fuck yeah McKenzie.
10.2) “Out of respect for you, I’ll honor the punishment you’ve already dealt” Damnit McKenzie, are you not even going to check that Greg actually did the thing he’s accused of?
11) “The younger girls seemed relieved that the confrontation” that would have been scary for them.
12.1) “Oh, and this name thing is ridiculous, Dad will not be participating in that.” That’s a better move from her.
12.2) “You can do what you want with Mom, but that’s final.” Next season, Cindy has to refer to Greg as Mr Wessen.
13) “She’d comply with McKenzie’s terms because she had no choice, and because, deep down, she knew better than to push her sister too far.” that’s for the best.
14) “another instance of the new order asserting itself in their family life.” I love that Madison finally got pulled into line.
15) “Each step she took was deliberate, her posture radiating an authority tempered by empathy” that’s a hard skill to master.
16) “He noticed again that his collar didn’t constrict when he spoke her name” you mentioned it was a mistake before, so had you edited it that his collar was off the while time.
17) “I didn’t mean to upset her. I just mentioned that you were my guardian when she spoke as if I belonged solely to her.” He doesn’t deserve to be punished for that, he’s done nothing wrong.
18) “Madison’s always been touchy about our relationship. She doesn’t like feeling second place” That sounds like a Madison problem.
19.1) “for the next two or three weeks, I’ll still see you, but just for a bit in the evenings, no overnights” That doesn’t sound so bad, He still gets to spend time with McKenzie, probably still get slipped human food, and then sleep with his wife.
19.2) “I could overrule her, but I won’t. I want this to work, and if I come in guns blazing, it won’t help. We’re adjusting to a new dynamic: we’re still sisters, but I’m also her parent. Balance is delicate here.” she’s in a tough spot, she has done mostly well so far.
20) “McKenzie,” Cindy interjected, the single word loaded with emotion. At once, Cindy felt her collar tighten” but it hasn’t been working all day.
21) “I get it, I have to prove myself” Damn I was not expecting Cindy to take it so well.
22) “I’m sorry for not giving your ideas and opinions the consideration they deserved when it mattered. I know saying it now doesn’t erase the past, but I am sorry, and I do love you. I’m so proud of who you’ve become.” She’s really been learning, not there yet but the journey’s been started.
23) “But you have to understand, both of you, you are Littles now. Things will be different because of that.” That’s likely the hardest part of any disability, though most disabilities don’t strip people of their rights
24) “Even if I’ve never been a fan. If her tests scores stay the same and she knows the material. My hands will be tied” She entirely could intervene though, or at least stop her piling her friends’ homework on too.
25.1) “A sudden tension cut through the air as Madison’s voice rang out from the doorway, sharper now.” I fucking hate that, Madison eves dropping on them getting lectured after she got to have hers without them seeing.
25.2) “See! That means you do it, and you shouldn’t have to hear it from McKenzie first.” and at that moment, McKenzie changed her mind and told Maddie to do her own damn homework as punishment for eavesdropping.
26) “I’m allowing them to make it up to me. But I haven’t heard any apologies, and I don’t appreciate my Littles running to you every time something doesn’t go their way.” ell if Maddie was better at listening to them, maybe they wouldn’t need to talk to McKenzie.
27.1) “Madison is right. You never let us pit you against each other growing up. You can’t guardian-shop now. If Madison says no, you have to accept that.” That can only be as fair as Madison is fair.
27.2) “Mads, you could be a bit more reasonable. I know you and Mom don’t think like I do, but they deserve some special consideration.” and if Madison follows this it’d be more fair.
28) Greg apologising to Madison made me sad, he’s not in the wrong here.
29) “McKenzie gave Madison a gentle nudge. “You could stand to watch that temper,” It’s good that Madison isn’t off the hook fully.
30) “Mom said a Little shouldn’t use first names—they aren’t equals” Suck shit Cindy
31) “You’re right, Mads. Thanks for the leniency with Dad.” She says that like Mads was given a choice.
32) “You promised you wouldn’t undermine me if I was reasonable.” well that comes back to the always subjective debate od “what is reasonable?”
33) “I hope you’re happy. McKenzie was out with friends, but she rushed home because our Littles couldn’t behave.” You were the one further out of line than them, and the one who contacted her.
34) “It should be clear now that I’m in charge of you, and I have McKenzie’s support. My word is law.” unfortunately Greg and Cindy didn’t get to watch McKenzie pull Madison into line, which is why it annoys me that Madison got to see McKenzie correcting them.
35) “Tomorrow’s another day, and I’m willing to give you a fresh start. Don’t make me regret it.” don’t make them regret trusting you.
36) “And I’m sorry you’re Littles” but not sorry for how she’s behaved, she keeps using Cindy as an excuse for her bullshit.
37) “that could have gone worse.” could have also gone better, much better.
I get very confused when I read your feedback. Maybe you could italicize your own comments, so that it stands out from stuff you are quoting from the story.
the story parts are in quotations. Lethal’s comments are after the quotations.
1.1) “All three girls sat up, startled, their conversation cutting off mid-sentence. Madison’s hand froze on the remote.” McKenzie’s being treated like a parent after all.
Answer: They knew better than to cross McKenzie. They are aware of what she is capable of in big sister mode. Now she’s been elevated.
1.2) “They turned as one to see McKenzie stepping into the house, her posture tight with purpose. A faint tension pressed into the air, like the momentary hush before a storm breaks.” Fuck ‘em up, McKenzie.
Answer: She got serious but she was restained. She didn’t want to fly off the handle as she is still adopting Madison and getting emancipated. She doesn’t want to cause problems that would break apart the family.
2) “Until I got your message. What’s going on?” she knew she was needed.
Answer: That message was like the bat signal.
3.1) “Madison’s heart gave a small, guilty flutter” Yeah baby, she knows she fucked up.
Answer: Madison definitely knew she went to far in that moment. As she knew how badly McKenzie wanted to be out with her friends doing normal things and she came home.
3.2) “You didn’t need to come home just for that. It’s not a huge deal. Dad was… speaking out of turn, not remembering that I’m his primary guardian. He needs a little reminder about how things are run.” I don’t think he’s getting reminded.
Answer: Madison trying to stand on business.
4) “I’ve let certain things slide, your attitude, how you address them. That ends now.” probably shouldn’t have let it start.
Answer: She is new to this and not very old. You don’t know what you don’t know as they say.
5) “For everything they’ve done for us, you owe them at least basic courtesy. Even if it’s just thanking them when they do something for you.” Finally, but that would also include McKenzie to Cindy
Answer: Cindy hasn’t done anything for McKenzie yet where she has needed to thank her. She could have thanked her for cleaning her sink I suppose but they had just gotten into an argument. which is what led to Cindy having to clean McKenzie’s sink in the first place.
6.1) “No, not ‘fine whatever.’ I mean it, Mads” yeah, don’t take that shit from her.
Answer: I like how into Madison getting shit talked you are.
6.2) “Save that tone for Mom if you must, but I won’t tolerate it.” I get where she’s coming from but it also goes against her previous point.
Answer: Madison could be more respectful to her parents while still giving them attitude. It’s not a one or the other situation. McKenzie is more saying she doesn’t want to hear the attitude and Greg shouldn’t either.
7) “Without warning, McKenzie closed the distance and hooked an arm around Madison’s neck in a gentle but firm headlock.” Just as the prophet foretold (Madison mentioning it in MW S1 E28)
Answer: Yup, sometimes you gotta play the long game. The stage was set early on and paid off later.
8) “The unspoken hierarchy was unmistakable, McKenzie’s dominance not just a legal arrangement, but something physical, immediate.” siblings do be like that.
Answer: When you come for the crown you best not miss as they say.
9) “You’ll always be my little sister, don’t forget that,” also mentioned in MW S1 E28.
Answer: Yes it was. McKenzie had enough and she was putting Madison back in her place as second fiddle.
101) “don’t ever punish Dad like that again. I will see him whenever I want, no permission needed” fuck yeah McKenzie.
Answer: You can tell what really pissed her off and pushed her over the edge. Madison fucked up.
10.2) “Out of respect for you, I’ll honor the punishment you’ve already dealt” Damnit McKenzie, are you not even going to check that Greg actually did the thing he’s accused of?
Answer: It’s not exactly what you think. She is more honoring the punishment to the letter and not doing sleepovers but she is still seeing him and then can just drop him off.
11) “The younger girls seemed relieved that the confrontation” that would have been scary for them.
Answer: Well they have seen McKenzie upset but she was controlled upset this time. they know it could have been much worse but were glad it ended mostly civilly. Krysi helped alot calming Madison a bit before McKenzie got home.
12.1) “Oh, and this name thing is ridiculous, Dad will not be participating in that.” That’s a better move from her.
Answer: She’s getting all her points out. She didn’t mention Cindy either. I halfway expected a get fucked Cindy from you at that part.
12.2) “You can do what you want with Mom, but that’s final.” Next season, Cindy has to refer to Greg as Mr Wessen.
Answer: That would be hilarious. I feel like that would probably put a damper on there marriage if she had to be so formal with him all the time or her collar goes off. If Madison did it she would probably do it for a joke and laughs.
13) “She’d comply with McKenzie’s terms because she had no choice, and because, deep down, she knew better than to push her sister too far.” that’s for the best.
Answer: Discretion is the better part of valor, as they say. Madison knew she was beat. She overstepped.
14) “another instance of the new order asserting itself in their family life.” I love that Madison finally got pulled into line.
Answer: Its kind of like when your kid and you touch the stove and find out its hot. Its that mistake you make to see how close you can get.
15) “Each step she took was deliberate, her posture radiating an authority tempered by empathy” that’s a hard skill to master.
Answer: Yet for McKenzie, flawless.
16) “He noticed again that his collar didn’t constrict when he spoke her name” you mentioned it was a mistake before, so had you edited it that his collar was off the while time.
Answer: Not as much editing as you think as McKenzie was already telling Madison to knock off the name with Greg. So I just had to do a super minor tweak to screw over Cindy and fit the narrative.
17) “I didn’t mean to upset her. I just mentioned that you were my guardian when she spoke as if I belonged solely to her.” He doesn’t deserve to be punished for that, he’s done nothing wrong.
Answer: Although to be fair Madison does have a level control so while he was wrong some extent she way overreacated.
18) “Madison’s always been touchy about our relationship. She doesn’t like feeling second place” That sounds like a Madison problem.
Answer: Madison would think otherwise. She may feel its a Greg problem for not giving her enough attention.
19.1) “for the next two or three weeks, I’ll still see you, but just for a bit in the evenings, no overnights” That doesn’t sound so bad, He still gets to spend time with McKenzie, probably still get slipped human food, and then sleep with his wife.
Answer: Odds are McKenzie will balance it out. Shes not opposed to him eating people food as long as he eats pellets and he doesn’t beg for people food.
19.2) “I could overrule her, but I won’t. I want this to work, and if I come in guns blazing, it won’t help. We’re adjusting to a new dynamic: we’re still sisters, but I’m also her parent. Balance is delicate here.” she’s in a tough spot, she has done mostly well so far.
Answer: Yeah you gotta let Madison win a round or two once awhile to keep her happy.
20) “McKenzie,” Cindy interjected, the single word loaded with emotion. At once, Cindy felt her collar tighten” but it hasn’t been working all day.
Answer: It just activates when you weren’t looking/reading.
21) “I get it, I have to prove myself” Damn I was not expecting Cindy to take it so well.
Answer: Not alot she can do
22) “I’m sorry for not giving your ideas and opinions the consideration they deserved when it mattered. I know saying it now doesn’t erase the past, but I am sorry, and I do love you. I’m so proud of who you’ve become.” She’s really been learning, not there yet but the journey’s been started.
Answer: She is still kind of doing the same thing McKenzie is faulting her for in just saying the words. She has said her apology now only action and proof through time will probably ever make McKenzie trust her.
23) “But you have to understand, both of you, you are Littles now. Things will be different because of that.” That’s likely the hardest part of any disability, though most disabilities don’t strip people of their rights
Answer: That is true. the reduction of rights is unique
24) “Even if I’ve never been a fan. If her tests scores stay the same and she knows the material. My hands will be tied” She entirely could intervene though, or at least stop her piling her friends’ homework on too.
Answer: She could intervene but that could also backfire for Greg and Cindy. As McKenzie won’t always be around to shield them if they really piss of Madison. Plus the homework isn’t all that uncommon.
25.1) “A sudden tension cut through the air as Madison’s voice rang out from the doorway, sharper now.” I fucking hate that, Madison eves dropping on them getting lectured after she got to have hers without them seeing.
Answer: Although its taking place in her bedroom. Is it really evesdropping in that scenario? Plus Madison normally snoops in Mckenzie’s business anyway as her little sister privilege
25.2) “See! That means you do it, and you shouldn’t have to hear it from McKenzie first.” and at that moment, McKenzie changed her mind and told Maddie to do her own damn homework as punishment for eavesdropping.
Answer: I think it bothers you more than them. They are more used to it though as well.
26) “I’m allowing them to make it up to me. But I haven’t heard any apologies, and I don’t appreciate my Littles running to you every time something doesn’t go their way.” ell if Maddie was better at listening to them, maybe they wouldn’t need to talk to McKenzie.
Answer: Its a delicate dance for sure.
27.1) “Madison is right. You never let us pit you against each other growing up. You can’t guardian-shop now. If Madison says no, you have to accept that.” That can only be as fair as Madison is fair.
ANSWER: That is true but its a learning experience for everyone. Somethings you only learn by trying it out seeing how it goes. As McKenzie is still young herself. Not every choice she makes can be the most ideal.
27.2) “Mads, you could be a bit more reasonable. I know you and Mom don’t think like I do, but they deserve some special consideration.” and if Madison follows this it’d be more fair.
Answer: She will probably be a bit more fair after seeing how far she can push things. She has a better idea of where the line is.
28) Greg apologizing to Madison made me sad, he’s not in the wrong here.
Answer: Adulthood is about knowing how to apologize even when you aren’t in the wrong. It’s not his first time doing something like that.
29) “McKenzie gave Madison a gentle nudge. “You could stand to watch that temper,” It’s good that Madison isn’t off the hook fully.
Answer: Shes not off the hook for sure. There will be a few readjustments in there relationship over time as they fall into new roles.
30) “Mom said a Little shouldn’t use first names—they aren’t equals” Suck shit Cindy
Answer: Cindy forever stuck under her own rules. I Can’t see McKenzie stepping in for her like she did for Greg.
31) “You’re right, Mads. Thanks for the leniency with Dad.” She says that like Mads was given a choice.
Answer: Well she had a choice. She could do it or face McKenzie’s wrath and then do it.
32) “You promised you wouldn’t undermine me if I was reasonable.” well that comes back to the always subjective debate od “what is reasonable?”
Answer: The fact you have any doubt is crazy. Madison exudes reasonable. I can hardly recall a moment in this series when she has been anything but the spitting image of reasonable /s
33) “I hope you’re happy. McKenzie was out with friends, but she rushed home because our Littles couldn’t behave.” You were the one further out of line than them, and the one who contacted her.
Answer: In Madison logic all of that started though because of hte littles. So its ultimately there fault. Shit rolls down hill as they say.
34) “It should be clear now that I’m in charge of you, and I have McKenzie’s support. My word is law.” unfortunately Greg and Cindy didn’t get to watch McKenzie pull Madison into line, which is why it annoys me that Madison got to see McKenzie correcting them.
Answer: Madison has an annoying way of being in the right place to take advantage of someone elses misfortune. Its part of her charcter. It’s part of her character
35) “Tomorrow’s another day, and I’m willing to give you a fresh start. Don’t make me regret it.” don’t make them regret trusting you.
Answer: True although Madison’s regrets carry more weight in this situation.
36) “And I’m sorry you’re Littles” but not sorry for how she’s behaved, she keeps using Cindy as an excuse for her bullshit.
Answer: Thats not an excuse though she has openly said she raising Cindy in the way she advocated. So its really Cindy’s own fault. if she advocated better Madison would be raising her to a better standard. The only hting keeping Cindy from living a Kelli style life was the fact that Cindy is a garbage human being with garbage values who advocated for horrendous causes. So now thats how she has to live the people around her believe this is how she wants to live.
That is 100% on Cindy as 0% on Madison.
37) “that could have gone worse.” could have also gone better, much better.
Answer: There is a better i doubt it could have gone much better personally.
1.1) Levelled up McKenzie is a fun concept.
1.2) No, but she does still need her power known.
3.1) It’s good that she’s being given boundaries.
3.2) Twist McKenzie’s perception.
4) True, I’ve learned from a crappy experience that if you don’t enforce the rules right from the beginning and show leniency with people still learning them, they won’t like it when the rules get enforced stricter later.
5) Cindy raised McKenzie, arguments aside McKenzie was still taken care of, her tennis paid for, and likely other interests supported, and I doubt that would have solely been Greg.
6.1) I’ve been waiting for this
7) So freaking good.
9) Love it.
101) It’s exactly the thing I thought she’d be most furious about, Madison has been subtly trying to undermine McKenzie and claim both as solely hers this whole time, but doing it so blatantly was not wise.
10.2) But not ensuring he actually deserves the punishment just allows power to be abused.
12.1) “I halfway expected a get fucked Cindy from you at that part” it’ll come later.
12.2) It would be hard on their marriage, but not something they couldn’t work through, and I entirely believe Madison would be spiteful like that.
13) I’m curious how far McKenzie could push in return.
14) Indeed.
16) Lol, then why could Cind do it too?
17) I don’t think it’s wrong to remind authority figures their limits of control, especially when they overstep. I’ve had to remind people who are above me at work that they don’t have total control of me and there are many times I won’t be doing their requests due to higher priority tasks.
18) Sounds like Greg’s given her plenty, she’s just being possessive, Likely Greg comforted the girls after confrontations with Cindy, since McKenzie’s had more, it’d look like she was getting more comfort from Greg. Or times Madison was spending with Cindy when Greg was with McKenzie, which would contribute to McKenzie calling Madison “Cindy’s favourite daighter”.
19.1) That leads to the question, where does McKenzie cross the line between Asking and begging?
19.2) such is the case with all women and girls.
20) I see, lol
22) Yeah, but doing the actions will likely come later, time will tell.
24) Making it backfire on Greg and Cindy could also backfire on Madison, McKenzie can’t always shield them but she can likely get Grag a collar with a recording device so she can watch more carefully.
25.1&2) It’s likely a personal issue, I used to get lectured in front of everyone while my siblings were spoken to in the privacy of their own rooms, I once got punished for eavesdropping on my little brother’s punishment, which wasn’t fair as mine was broadcast for the whole family at the dinner table.
26) One Madison has to figure out if she wants them trusting her with their issues.
27.1) True, but Madison is far too self-absorbed to see how it goes, she won’t likely see any negative effect it’ll have on them.
27.2) That’s true, but she’ll find loopholes and spite to get what she wants, try to hide certain things from McKenzie.
28) When you give those sorts of apologies they lessen the value of your real ones.
29) It’s a pity she’s not actually being punished though
31) Your definition of “having a choice” is different than mine.
33) Well, I hope she learns that she can’t blame them for everything.
34) It’s a frustrating trait for a person to have.
35) Much more, so I hope they can find a way to make her regret how she’s treated them.
36) Madison has also stated she didn’t agree with everything Cindy preached, and that she doesn’t have to treat a little how they want to be treated, which means she’s well aware she could choose to be better.
At most I’d say 60% on Cindy and 40% on Madison.
Uh why didn’t Greg tell about doing Mads’ friends homeworks!!
That’s what I’m wondering. Doing madison sucks but kenzie won’t budge on that. Doing all of her friends though is a bit much